Schedule and Location

Our group meets on the first and third Wednesday of each month at the Nokomis Fire Station. From Sarasota or North, proceed a few blocks south of Albee Road on US 41 (past Matthews-Currie Ford) to Pavonia Road. Turn right (West, toward the bay) at the Fire Station's flashing yellow caution traffic light. From the south on US 41, we are two blocks north of Dona Bay. Turn left onto Pavonia Road at the flashing yellow caution light. At the Fire Station, drive to the fire hall's far end or west side; PLEASE DO NOT BLOCK THE FIRE DEPARTMENT DOORS! We gather in the training room at the far end of the complex for a meet and greet at 6:00 pm but call the Meeting to order at 6:30 pm and take a Ten-minute break at around 7:50 pm. Meeting Adjourns: 9:00 pm

Tuesday, July 21, 2020

July 15th, 2020

Only 3 members signed in for the last ZOOM meeting. Ernie, James, and Rod met for about an hour, using a pair of time blocks. We didn’t read much, a few excerpts, but we did have a great discussion about several subjects. 

Do you put yourself into your writing? You got your character into a predicament and don’t know how to get out of it. What do you do? Do you find yourself putting yourself in your character’s shoes? I do. I’ve awakened in the middle of the night a solution to the issue in my brain. I have to get up and jot it down, if not I’m likely to not remember it by the morning. 

Some of you tell me, “I keep a pad and pencil beside the bed so I can write down ideas that come to me in the night. Wonderful! I have a problem with that, actually several problems. 
1. It’s dark and I can’t see to find the pad.
2. If I turn the light on, Betsy’s likely to knock me clean out of the bed.
3. I have to find my glasses, couldn’t see the pad without them.
4. By the time I find the pad, find my glasses, and find my way out of the bedroom to my desk, I forget the idea anyway.
Some really great ideas have disappeared into the vapor. Maybe someday they will visit when I’m wide awake.

Well, anyway… Wednesday evening, August 5th, we’ll be back on Zoom. Look for your invitation in your email. If you’ve not received an invitation to previous meetings, email me at rodshs62@hotmail.com to get on the list. What we usually do, Rod sets up a meeting beginning at 6:30 PM. The meetings are 40 minutes long and as we near the end of the segment, we close the segment and sign on to a segment scheduled by Ernie to continue our meeting, it gives us a short break.

The agenda for the upcoming meeting will be strictly for reading pieces with which we are having issues. Have your work ready and sign in on time. I might even be able to extend the meeting by scheduling a third session if we need it. In any case, until we meet again, KEEP ON WRITING.



Read the following article from the FWA, 
I think you'll find it interesting
Point of View: No Social Distancing, Please

 posted in: Writing Craft  6
Photo by Warren Wong on Unsplash
As we all know, point of view (POV) is the personage from whose perspective we readers perceive the action of the novel. Back in the nineteenth century, authors tended to go for the “omniscient narrator” — a disembodied, god-like voice that took no personal part in the action, that could see what was in the heart of everyone, could see what the villains were up to behind the protagonist’s back, and could see what everybody looked like. Could see, in short, both the inside and the outside of all the characters. Often the omniscient narrator even knew what would happen in the future, and he clued us in to his superpower with phrases like, “Jane did not know it then, but it would be her last evening in New York.”
This POV is often used in the framing device of a person telling a story that has been transmitted to him by others, so that they are looking back on events. There’s not a thing wrong with that approach. It has advantages. You can fill the reader in on all sorts of facts that help him follow the story without the protagonist having to know. But it is literally distant—it keeps the reader at arm’s length from the action and emotions. She is always just watching, as from the audience of a stage play.

Scoot in closer…

Much more popular these days are closer points of view. You can argue the cause — do we crave closeness in an increasingly depersonalized world? — but most readers seem to like to view the action from the point of view of a single character.
Now, the POV can vary. One chapter or scene may be from one personage’s viewpoint, and the next from that of someone else. This makes up for the limitations in any one character’s knowledge. But we can only be watching the action from the eyes of one person at a time. And more important, we can only feel what that one person is feeling.
A distant third person POV pretty much limits itself to what that character sees and hears; it can’t read the minds of others. It can’t say “Jane was glad to leave New York, but Peter wasn’t.” If Jane is the POV character, she can only know her own feelings, not Peter’s. Let her tell us something like, “Jane was glad to leave New York, but Peter threw down his book and stomped out of the room.” Those actions are what Jane could see and know about Peter’s reaction.
Conversely, no third person POV lets us see the POV character from the outside. She can’t tell us what she looks like, or what expression overtakes her. “Jane was glad”, not “A flush of pleasure made Jane’s face rosy.”

And closer…

Still, a distant third person doesn’t give us any particular insights into the interior of the POV character. And so there is a close third person POV, which takes us inside the protagonist (or other’s) head, shows what they’re thinking, what they’re feeling as if we were they and they were we.
I must say, I’m partial to this POV, because it gives us another layer to reveal about the character that they might dissemble on the outside. The more visceral — the more corporeal — the descriptions of their emotions, the more we become them. We shiver with trepidation, our heartbeats quicken, our throat tightens up as if we were really in that character’s body and not just their head. It takes a bit of self-awareness on the author’s part to stay consistently in character and not let slip something that their POV couldn’t know.

Anybody else out there?

But the third person POV, distant or close, is only one of several options for point of view. There is, of course, first person. “I did this or that.” It’s a very popular device, to make one of the characters tell the tale in their own voice. It might be imagined that this draws the reader more closely into that person’s head, but I’m not sure it always does. There are so many things a character wouldn’t say or even know about herself. However, it’s widely used as a way to establish immediacy.
And then there’s the second person: “You did this or that.” Presumably this makes the reader complicit, puts him on stage with the cast. But it’s really hard to handle well. I personally find it irritating, and I guess others do too, because you don’t see much of it. For a strikingly successful second person POV, see Rumer Godden’s short story, “You Needed to Go Upstairs.”
Whichever POV you use, just be consistent and don’t break out of character.

Monday, July 06, 2020

JULY 1st, 2020


When will COVID go away? It doesn’t look good for the near future. So, I guess we’ll have to “endeavor to persevere” as did Chief Dan George in the movie The Outlaw Josie Wales.



Do you have phrases that hang around in your mind and appear at the most inopportune times? As a writer using these famous, or not so famous, phrases can get you in trouble. The other day I was editing my current endeavor and this phrase popped into my head. Following its usual path, it slid down the nerves and jumped from my fingertips to the keyboard. About 1500 words later, I reread what I’d written, I do that when I seem to lose my concentration and have to find out where my mind has gone. Well anyway, there was this phrase in my manuscript, unintentionally I plagiarized the work of another author. I don’t know if the sin would have been noticed or not, but I found it and fixed the issue. Could I have been in violation of the law, of a willful theft of intellectual property, or maybe just a violation of an unwritten morality that should prevent us from taking an easy way out? I feel the same way about clichés, using them is a lazy writer’s way of expressing themselves when they don’t take the time to think through a problem. Oh well, Nuff said, let’s get on to the Zoom Meeting the other night.



I goofed big time and sent out invitations with the wrong date on them. Our meeting was Wednesday, not Tuesday. Even though I sent a correction, some of our writers had an issue with connecting. Please accept my apologies.



Ernie, Scott, James, Peter, and I welcomed Frank Shima as he joined us for the first time. With time limitations imposed by the program, we had two meetings of 40 minutes each with a short intermission as we changed over.



Have you ever experienced the phenomenon of vanishing notes? I find it happens more when youngsters are visiting than when I’m here with only Betsy to keep me company. This week my notes have faded into the time warp of disorganization as well as a hectic holiday weekend. It’s been a bad time for old-timers. I’ll have to rely on what remains of my memory.



Scott was gracious enough to read a piece he read back in November while I was in Lousiana. I hadn’t heard it and those who did didn’t mind hearing it again. Scott’s work is always worth a second or even more reading. Thanks.



It’s after the Civil War and James Kelly has taken us to the high plains of the Dakota Territories as his saga of the military family continues. James had an interesting dilemma. His story is following the life of a family of soldiers and it was time to bring the son into the spotlight as the main character. How to fall away from the previous character, the father, even with a time-lapse of several years. What method do you think he should choose?



With Constantine on the throne, the Christian Church is making strides in the fourth century, but treachery is afoot. Infighting among religious leaders carries over into the government. Ernie takes us inside the battle as powerful Senators join forces against a powerful widow to spur on the opposing leaders, hoping to bring division within the ranks of Constantine’s supporters. A spy in their midst reports to the emperor.



With the discussion, critique, and general enjoyment of listening, the time flew by and we were out of time. Our next Zoom Meeting will be Wednesday, July 15th, at 6:30 PM. We will send out invitations by the 14th. If you have not received an invitation by 6:00 PM on the 14th, send me an urgent email. I’ll get you on the list.



Until next time; KEEP ON WRITING!